Today was an interesting day.
When I got up it was so white I couldn’t see
anything because it snowed last night. Then I realized school stared in 30
minutes and I was still half asleep so I hurried
down stairs and I didn’t make a lunch so I brought money for the cafeteria. I got
a sandwich even thought I don’t like them. Before we went out for
lunch they had an announcement it said. “We are having a battery drive so don’t forget your batteries.” After they said that I was so energetic to go home because I remembered I have dance today.
star: Great job varying your sentence lengths.
ReplyDeletewish: I wish it was more clear as to what is going on in your writing.
wish: I wish you used more descriptive words.